This is great, Paula. Saying she was "cuddled up" makes me imagine she is making herself small, or in need of comfort. "Scrolling" a "timeline" let me work out she's using social media without explicitly saying so. And "fake flawlessness" is alliteration, a language feature. You didn't ever say the word lonely, or sad, but I get the feeling that she is.
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This is great, Paula. Saying she was "cuddled up" makes me imagine she is making herself small, or in need of comfort. "Scrolling" a "timeline" let me work out she's using social media without explicitly saying so. And "fake flawlessness" is alliteration, a language feature. You didn't ever say the word lonely, or sad, but I get the feeling that she is.
Excellent job 'showing' instead of 'telling' :)
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